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do you know how it feels
to feel uneeded
i pleaded for you to love me
and make me feel loved
make me feel special
but ive had enough
this isnt playful meaness
its not even rough love
its cruel and harsh and spiteful
i need nothing from you
stay the **** away from me
this pain is nothing new
im just a fool
a fool
who comes back for more
and everytime i do
on me you slam that door
after everything ive done
and all that ive been through
it amounts to s*** in your eyes
your blind to what is true
cos i was there for you
i was there
and when i need a hand
the hand i held is gone
like memories in sand
for you there supposedly is none
you can be there if you try
but you wont and thats the thing
i helped to heal and make you better
now you break my wings
and i cant go
i cant go anywhere
its because i cant leave this nest
although i know in my heart
leavings for the best.

------
I am a misunderstood genius.


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The following comments are for "Leave the nest."
by damaged

Nested
Fairly effective poem with lots of emotion.

One line that really went clunk for me: "on me you slam that door" - I would delete "on me" - I think it really throws the rhythm off.

I like the part about how you helped heal, then you became the one with broken wings. It's something that has recently occupied my mind also.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: July 20, 2006 )





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