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dont stop loving me
it makes life worth living
and it gives me a reason
to carry on giving
giving to you to make an us
id gladly forever make a fuss
better to be with someone i love than alone
but better alone with a heart of stone
than with someone who doesnt love me
than with someone who wont hug me
who pushes me around
and isnt around that much
who needs a broken crutch?
not me
who needs to feel a loving touch
but me?
who needs to be told theyre loved so much
but me?
im thinking we can make it
can you take me out?
im thinking you cant fake it
so dont fake it shout it out
we're gonna be ok
we're gonna be ok
ok

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I am a misunderstood genius.


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The following comments are for "OK."
by damaged

Needs some work
Cliche and the rhyme scheme seems force. Im sure you can up with something more original than "heart of stone". The line breaks seem random have no significant reason to them. The poem doesn't flow to well really. I think your problem is your forcing the rhymes and the poem just ends up reading like another one of the poems i've read a thousand times. Needs work.

( Posted by: Sparx [Member] On: July 19, 2006 )

i know
i know it is but my original entries tend not to get commented so i thought lets have a test. thankfully it didnt get praised i dont like that poem.

( Posted by: damaged [Member] On: July 22, 2006 )





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