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Hendrix on the Wind



His notes flow in with the sea,
with the gentle dusk tides rolling,
rolling into the patient beach
that knows that all things come again
Vibrations, waves
Chords, foam
His gentle, bronzy voice
rolls in on the waves
between the notes from his LesPaul
He returns to play again
Distortion, wind
Blues, brine
The merman he would turn to be
decades well past nineteen-eighty-three
swims in to share his ancient muse with me
the notes that ring eternally
Strings, sound
Jimi, found
again on the wind and the sea
that always roll back in again,

eventually

My sandcastles rise and fall
All my poems, rhymes and all
will fall beneath the tide

But his guitar and words
will speak forever
on the waves that peak
on foamy purple chords
Mermaids, dreams
Music, beams
of purple lightning cast across a sky
on endless waters from the past

I come here to hear him
sing and play for me,
and I might learn to play
like him

eventually



for Jimi, July 9, 2006


------
The Alienist
jhfurnish@yahoo.com


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The following comments are for "Hendrix on the Wind"
by The Alienist

Purple haze and waves
This is rather appealing - it has atmosphere, and for a fan letter, it doesn't sound annoyingly grovelling. I can hear the lilting water rhythm and see you sitting on the beach and strumming, conjuring up the merman muse and his stormy purple haze. Took me by surprise, because for me, such music isn't for pensive summer beach-nights - it's for driving and break-ups, for angry spiky violent things.

I particularly like the riff on personal impermanence vz enduring art. I don't much like the use of a brand name, however iconic. And I'm unsure about the final line... perhaps because this poem seems more about relaxed admiration than about any striving-to-emulate??

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: July 11, 2006 )

tribute
Excellent word tribute to Jimmy . There will never be another Hendrix.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: July 12, 2006 )

brand-name?
Jimi was famous for his religious use of LesPaul electric guitars almost as much as he was for his playing. Mitch Mitchell remarked that his favorite LesPaul should've been buried with him. He had a helluva collection of LesPauls. Thus, I insist it's more than appropriate here, brand-name or no.

Also, it's not a 'fan-letter', but rather simply a tribute and a commemoration, and the word 'eventually' is a theme that paens to a song of his, which I reference rather clearly earlier on: 'Castles in the Sand' from 'Axis: Bold as Love'.

( Posted by: The Alienist [Member] On: July 13, 2006 )

Shooting Star
Beautiful homage to a great artist. It's hard to believe what he accomplished in such a short life. Loved the "merman" reference since Electric Ladyland is my favorite Hendrix album. The ebb & flow devices are nice & tasty - "distortion, wind/ blues, brine" and elsewhere.

3rd from last line, 1st word: did you mean to use "that" instead of "and?" I suppose it works either way.

A few years ago, I fell in love with the music of Johnny "Guitar" Watson and learned that Hendrix had picked up a few stage antics from him, including "picking with the teeth."



Didn't think the ending was quite as strong as the rest of the poem, but in this kind of poem, so what?

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: July 16, 2006 )

The Music Misses Jimi
...and if the wind screams Jimi
it's only music crying out...
for ingenuity...

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 28, 2016 )





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