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Body press
Smile and sway
Stone expression
Wipe away
Light on feet
Heavy on heart
Push and pull
Controlling start
Masturbation energy
Laugh overflow
Epileptic arrangement
Spazz 'til you blow
Drink, drink
Wink, wink
With a flirt
And a smile
Slow and steady
Caution: ready
Don't hurt her
Fragile body
Thin, tall
No control
Short, small
Out of place
Staring straight
At her chest
Breath and sweatdrop
Care to break
Twirl, swirl
Never stop
Dance, dance
Dance 'til you drop


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The following comments are for "Tango"
by Kambriel

Erm...
Wow...Thanks...To be honest, I don't think I've ever had anyone be that articulate about being jealous of something I've done. Heehee. Thanks, though, I'm glad you liked it.

( Posted by: kambriel [Member] On: June 24, 2003 )

pulse
kambriel~

I really like your use of rhythm and meter in this poem. I could hear the bass line in my head as I read this one. I can see why Jess would be jealous. This is excellent and heady stuff.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: June 25, 2003 )

If You Drop It Own It
If you're not dancing...
when you drop...
you're still face-down on the dance floor

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 24, 2015 )





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