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Do you want to try something new? It's called PARALLELISMUS MEMBRORUM it is of Hebrew origin. It has lines of parallel construction and presents antitheses and complementary extensions. The lines are usually short and contain three or for words...Here is my try at it...

Ghost
The silent mist
screams my name.
Tortured, miserable, soul
is now at peace.
It's freezing breath
heats my longing heart.
Go to the light
fade into the darkness.

I'm sure there are those on lit that can do much better...It's good to exercise your writing skills...have a go at it...Kacee

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Kacee Huggs


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The following comments are for "PARALLELISMUS MEMBRORUM THREAD"
by Nitz Kitty

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..and not a single comment?

my random reading for today..

..appears as being like a senryupsyched poem

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 6, 2011 )

Bobby is so nice
you are so nice and such a gentleman

As a rabbi's daughter and girls' seminary graduate, I know we haven't seen nor studied such Hebrew poetry. I know that early Christian poetry did experiment with Hebrew. Sounds complicated.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 6, 2011 )

Trying new things
Bobby, You know me always trying to exercise my old brain...I found this on Google when looking for different styles of poetry and thought I'd give it a try...I had no idea if it came from Hebrew or not...Just went by what it said on Google...Lilia had a try at it but don't know what happened to her work...I think she took a lot off when she left...Vickie, It is quite difficult...guess that's why there were no takers...Thanks for your in put...Bobby is a very nice person and most of a a dear friend...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: April 6, 2011 )





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