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Laughter became remedy
of my uncovered secrets.
Tease if you will,
Iíll pretend not to hear.
Eat at it,
poke at it,
bask in cheap thrills for
whether or not life agrees
this joke is not on me.
Sacred words,
became free and as
they found their way out
detoured all ears but yours.
Let them seep in slowly,
here as they whisper again and again,
when itís all over
youíll be searching for more.


------
I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Sacred Words"
by nae411

Always,
You always do that; you know, make me re-think and re-read what you have written.

I'm not sure of my interpretation this time, but I get the idea that someone thinks they are leading the ego parade when in fact everyone else is spending the afternoon at the beach.

One suggestion: I would change the middle section to present tense -- more direct and striking.

"Sacred words,
become free and as
they find their way out
detour all ears but yours."

That'll show 'im

Very nice
BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: June 30, 2006 )

Yeah..Nae..
I was also made to re-think and re-read ur poem.

Regards,

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: July 1, 2006 )

That'll show 'im
BWoz, your comment made me giggle. Glad I make you reread, lol. I have to say I like your interpretation.

GSVK, thank you so much for stopping by and commenting. Hope to see you around soon.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 2, 2006 )





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