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It's a pity,
is it not?

For each joy there is a tear,
For each passion a fear,
And against all that we hold dear,
Closed into our own hearts,
Our castle, castle hearts.

We are brick, stone and wall
Watch us crumble, watch me fall,
within these barricades I crawl,
My castle, castle heart.

Why my dearest, Why, oh why, oh why?
Why must I reach to the sky,
why does time fly me by,
why mustn't I try,
to pierce your castle, castle heart?

It's a pity,
is it not?

We have castle, castle hearts,
yet no drawbridge!

------
Art is addicting, an addict am I,
truth is I, the truth am I, the truth a lie!


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The following comments are for "Castle Hearts"
by Siah

Siah
I may be wrong but this poem seems to say that we build up walls to keep people from hurting us ...letting no one in...afraid of living...oh my...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 26, 2006 )

A Fear We Must Rise Above
I see what Ms. Kitty is saying, but I can interpret this poem a second way.
I think that this poem is telling of the fear to fall in love that so many people have. There are people who don't want to risk having their feelings hurt by someone who is supposed to love them.
I know somebody who is like that, and I am going to help him open up his heart and soul. I want to see him be free-spirited and have the freedom to be.
Great poem, Siah: it is very inspirational.
(By the way, you now have access to my MSN Space).

-Aubri, a. k. a. "Leopard Lady"

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: June 26, 2006 )

Fear
Correct you both are! I wrote this poem inspired by those afraid of being hurt so they made walls around their hearts. But also those who are afraid of being rejected in love so they never ever leave their castled hearts. Right now I myself am falling in the second category.
Aubri and Kacee, thanks for commenting.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 26, 2006 )

so true
I know what ya mean with the 2 diffrent sides. Me myself have had both types. I kept people at a distance, but now i opened up a bit :D. At the moment i'm semi closing my castle heart so i could concentrate more on a task i have this coming year. closing the castle will evantually lead to emptyness, a void... so don't close your heart people, let it live.

( Posted by: deraj [Member] On: June 27, 2006 )

Chapter1, Deraj, Kacee, Aubri
Thanks for even visiting this piece, I have been having doubts about certain things in these last few days. Chapter1, a poem has fallen to your liking! Deraj, long time without hearing from you on LIT, welcome back.

Percy/Siah out!

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 27, 2006 )

A.
Couldn't be bothered to read the other comments, so may already have all been said. oh well.

Very good, quite amusing. I really like the narrative voice, gives it a human quality, very important i feel. 'It's a pity, Is it not?', great start, I love that style of uncertainty, as if what we will hear will be something over which to muse.

Having had a look, it appears people are trying to 'get' the poem. erm...so i guess it's about how we hate ourselves for creating these boundries between people, hiding away what we really want to say?

Thanks for the read,

Adam.

( Posted by: Thea Veol [Member] On: June 30, 2006 )





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