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sniffing wind as it floats by
can't quite figure out the smell
familiar pungent odor
yikes-broccoli farts


The Dodoitsu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about love or humor. It has 26 syllables made of of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively. It is unrhymed and non-metrical.

For all who like a challenge...and love to try different forms of poetry...add some of your own folk songs with a Japanese twist...Kacee

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Kacee Huggs


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The following comments are for "Something is in the Wind"
by Nitz Kitty

Dodoitsu 1
Ice Princess, heart of cruelty,
try as you may with my soul,
It shall never be frozen;
I am your candle.

Sea breeze upon the soft skin
of youngsters as their lips part;
Sweetest orgasm as their eyes,
open to sunlit day.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 20, 2006 )

sorry
The last line is supposed to be
"Upon sunlit day."
Sorry

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 20, 2006 )

thread
Thanks you Siah for joining in...your contribution is lovely...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 20, 2006 )

Break wind but not rules- cool!
My dodoitsu may smell.
I've no subject- can you tell?
It is a different form.
It isn't my norm.

s

(As if I had a norm.)

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: June 21, 2006 )

oops
I couldn't help rhyming, but I think I managed the lack of timing.

I may attempt again.

s


( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: June 21, 2006 )

Drsoos
At least you posted...so what if you rhymed...rules are made to be broken...post as many times as you wish...I enjoyed it...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 21, 2006 )

Dodoitsu 2
True, I am without a clue
North, south, all calling my name,
So I aimlessly traverse
This odd little world.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Siah
Keep on going the world needs you...you are really good at this...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Love of humor, for humor loved
Cosmo ranks "humor" higest
On it's chart of men's good traits.
So "funny" on guys is like
Great tits on gals. Cool.

( Posted by: andyhavens [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Andy
I would say "funny " on guys is like tits on a Tom cat...but I like yours too...You win the Cosmo Humor Award...thanks for the submit....Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Kacee!
Introducing a new form
of orient origin
to my itty bitty world
Thank you nitz kitty!

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Dodoitsu
Siah,
I love to try new things ...I get all excited and want to pass it on...I'm glad you are starting to feel the same as I do about the dodoitsu...I have even tried the sestina...which is a tuffy...It is being published in a poetry Mag...in it's next issue...I'm so thrilled...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Dodoitsu
(7, 7, 7, 5) I hope I get this right.

(to the tune of "where have all the flowers gone")

where have all the good queers gone?
drag queen heaven living on?
dreams of chiffon, lace and rouge,
they dream and live it.



( Posted by: castanedalupe [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

published poet kacee nitz kitty
you're getting published how exciting! I almost forgot to congratulate you.

where have all the good queers gone,
drag queen heaven living on?
dreams of chiffon, lace and rouge,
immortality!

Do you like that one better than this one kacee?

where have all the good queers gone?
drag queen heaven living on?
dreams of chiffon, lace and rouge,
they dream and live it.

( Posted by: castanedalupe [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

tc
You are too much...you even have the music...hehe...thanks for the congrats...no big deal...I think it was a fluke...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Nitz - congrats
Don't blame anything on a fluke.... take a bow and be proud of your talent.

Lady M

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Lady M
Thanks ...I missed you...I thought I would find a dodoitsu from you...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )

Dodoitsu 3
Fever is what attracted
the heat from your bittersweet
love into my arms tonight
until forever.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

give me a try
and i will sit in my room
dreaming of flowers to bloom
and the rain comes to wash them
away like the dawn of day

( Posted by: schindees [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Siah and schindees
Thanks you so much for the additions to my thread...Siah, you are really getting into this...great job...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Published Poet Congratulations Kacee
See there you were right about not needing those $500 words.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Dodoitsu 4
Elements of fire and wind
Bind me to this world of flame
with zephyrs softer than love
and oceans of dreams.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Siah and uwx
Siah...you amaze me...you have a gift for the dodoitsu
uwx...I did use some $250 words...had to look them up...Thanks
Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Kacee/ Props!
Brought smile.

Enjoyed dodoitsu, as well,
RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Bobby 7L
Thank you so much...good to see you again...kacee

( Posted by: Nitz kitty [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

Answering AH's dodoitsu
Sadly, humor ain't so good
on girls - it just scares men off.
(Same is true of tits on guys,
humorous or not.)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: June 23, 2006 )

MobiusSoul
Thanks for joining in...is that true ...guys don't like gals with a sense of humor? I must be doing something wrong...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 24, 2006 )

Back at Mobius! You're wrong!

Only weak men cannot laugh
at their faults and mannish tits.
Girls with humor are my life!
Gravity, though... sucks.

( Posted by: andyhavens [Member] On: June 25, 2006 )

Fragrant Love
carried with a misty rain
mingling to my salty tears
happiness is bountiful
just like a summer garden
calm before the storm

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 29, 2006 )

Dar
That is beautiful...thanks for adding to the thread...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz kitty [Member] On: June 29, 2006 )

Kacee
this one brought a smile.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Wanda
I always get a snicker when a fart is mentioned...and we eat a lot of broccoli around here so I know of what I speak...Phew!
Thanks for reading and commenting...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )





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