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Free Fire



A line of life
Intersects
Affects
People
Things alive
Things said to be
Inert

Arrow
Arc
Momentum

Perfectly deflectable

Penetration
Dispersion

Marble
Flipped into the circle
With others
Scatter
Clack

Crack knuckles

We want to be cats
Who meant to do that

Some see all bumping
Energies
Brothers
Sisters

Some want to take their arrow
With sideways sweep
Clear the circle
Of everything




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johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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The following comments are for "Free Fire"
by Flonigus

John, Marbles& Arrows
Most of the time, I don't get compression poetry. Bobby7L does a lot of it. Sometimes I get it on my own, most times, I wait for commenters to comment, then the light goes on. I get this one though. I really like it. It is written very well. Flow, flow flows, Flonigus.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: June 16, 2006 )

All fired up...
Neat: I'm rarely one for the very oblique or very compressed either, but I think I got this one, and I do like the childrens'-games metaphor for human interactions. (If only we weren't all marbles and projectiles, hard, cold, bumptious and knuckle-cracking... if only we could try being... I dunno... fuzzy-felt?)

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: June 16, 2006 )

Thanks to W hill & Mobius s
I like fuzzy, too.

Thank you Charlie and Caitlin, for this and all your input on this site.

~ John


( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: June 17, 2006 )





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