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The encroching darkness plagues our hearts with fear,
Yet not our stained souls.
Our precious gift of god has retreated,
Is this our punishment?

You gave us life, you gave us joy.
You gave us pain, and sorrow.
You gave us all, yet you we rejected.
You died for us, yet we spit on your grave.

Your stone has rolled away,
Rolled into our path, onto our backs.
These rules of ten, we forsake.
These joys in your hand, slap away.

We embrace the wretched prince.
Benieth the blackened wing we sleep.
Chill we've traded for constant steam.
No remorse, nor fear nor chear.
Acceptance is now our way.
As in the prince's shelter, we hapily char.

To live ones life free from the constraints of judgement is truely bliss.

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The following comments are for "trade of souls"
by crackpotpoet

Wow...nobody else could have stated the truth of the world's current state better than that! This poem should be a real eye-opener to the non-believers-as well as a catalyst to bring in more believers.
Great job!

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: June 12, 2006 )

i am a none-believer. the christian teachings are great, if they were possible. the part at the end refered to the majority of 'mainstream christians', as well as none believers such as my self. the book is based off of ideals that are not humanly possible.

( Posted by: crackpotpoet [Member] On: June 13, 2006 )

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