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I’d be depressed
If I had the interest
Or the energy

Maybe we’ve had
Just too much
Rain

The poem I just read
Amused me
Slightly

But my façade
Refused to
Bend

My face
of Iron
Hangs

I can’t remember
How long it’s
Been

Since I’ve
Felt
Like this

I had forgotten
How
It felt

I should
Take
A walk

That would be
Healthy
And I will

After a
Little
Snooze.





------
There's only today


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The following comments are for "Too Much Rain"
by LadyMitulia

Rain, rain go away...
Sometimes I feel the same way...days I'd rather stay in bed with the covers over my head...Is it depression or the old fashioned blahs? I refuse to stay there...I hope it was my poem...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: June 8, 2006 )

pen,nitz, lucie
Thank you all for commenting. The day I wrote this, I was reading a lot of Lit pieces and everytime I opened the page, this banner came up about depression, with different photos and lead-ins. I went to some of the links to read about it. The articles were primarily about distinguishing the difference between bi-polar disorder and clinical depression.

It was an interesting read, and it had been a very dreary rainy day (again) so I thought I'd try to write something from a depressed person's point of view. The weather made it a little easier.

Your comments were very much appreciated.

Pen, I guess this was an effective poem in that it brought you to that place enough to make you uncomfortable with it.

Nitz - how true that we all experience the blues at times, but we really want to shrug it off when someone is expressing that feeling - it's almost like we are afraid it will wash over onto us and we'll be stuck in that mode.

Lucie - all very perceptive comments. I think we do try to make sense of these things by trying to nail down the source, or decide what name we should attach to it. When, every person has such a complex and unique experience, there are usually many factors.

I don't like to read depressing poetry either. Or, I need about five warm ones to cancel out the cold one I've read. I can't help but wonder why we feel that way when it is such a part of the human experience.

Thanks for your insightful comments!
Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 9, 2006 )

LadyMitulia's Too Much Rain
I like your sincerity. There is a simple purity to your poetry that I find captivating and refreshing. I will be looking for more from you.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: June 9, 2006 )

The Blues
This made me feel like I do after watching a movie that has made me cry. Feel the depression but can't claim it as my own. You did good stirring the pot in me. Look forward to reading more of you.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: June 9, 2006 )

unseen and Nae
Thanks for visiting my post and commenting. I look forward to reading, posting and learning more here at Lit.

So far, it seems that people on this site are pretty good about giving candid feedback. That makes me think I will hand out here more often.

Thanks again!
Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 9, 2006 )

LadyM/ Let it Rain
LM- Wouldn't think you'd 'forget' how it felt.

Word: "will," seems pretty 'positive' to me...I read: "might."

Interesting read.

A comment above contains question: if intent is for piece to be: 'liked.' I've been writing for 3+ decades... 99.9% of time, wishing/intending for reader to "like" what was being penned did not cross mind. (A freelanced brochure for an aftercare facility, an exception example.) Creativity, originality and unique perspective gets in way of that approach...for me, anyway... No wonder I'm not on Oprah.

Take care of you,
7L


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 9, 2006 )

Siah
Lovely comments, all of you. This poem fell on me heavily, like rain, and it kept hitting way afterwards. Now, sadly, I must say I didn't like the poem. Reason for that the that I felt that you were saying the same thing over and over (much like depressed people do) and it got annoying. But since you wanted me to feel uncomfortable, I applaud you.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 10, 2006 )

bobby z
The line, "I had forgotten how it felt" alludes to the way both depressed and hypercondriacle people always think "this time it's the worst - I am more miserable that ever this time"

"I will" refers to how "they" always make promises to change habits, go to counseling, or follow through on a number of things. Whether the mean it or not, they say it, but it doesn't usually come to pass, as expressed by "after a little snooze"

Thanks for the great comments

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 10, 2006 )

siah - rain
I did want to give the sense of that pathetic defeatist attitude.

However, I felt each verse was a different consideration - as if the subject is trying to figure out the cause as well as making self-observations about how their face is relentlessly heavy even when they are amused by something they've read.

Thanks for commenting. I appreciate your candor and hope you read and comment on more of my work as I post.

Regards,
Lady M

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 10, 2006 )

Still raining...
LadyM- Thanks for clarification.

It's sad how sickness of brain is perceived. Indeed, depression is an illness, just as cancer. Funding for research and cure amounts to Band-Aid for gaping wounds, with regard to mental illness.

Provoking thought, validates worthiness of a piece, even if not 'liked.'

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 11, 2006 )





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