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I feel hollow today,
As if my mind and soul
Have morphed
Into a dry bubble.
Nothing goes out
And definitely
Not much is coming in.

Hopefully some rain
Will pour over,
Or a ray of light
Will pierce my shell,
Letting me out
And letting you in.

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The following comments are for "A shell"
by Thea

rain of fire or a simple ray of light
I feel the Peace today,
As if my mind and soul
Have morphed
Into a light bubble.
Definitely everything goes out
And All,
Is coming in.

Fire rain
Pour over,
Or a ray of light
Pierce my soul,
Letting me out
And letting you in.

pentru ploaia ce va veni
cu prietenie, laur

( Posted by: laur [Member] On: June 21, 2006 )

Multumesc Laur..wonderful re-wording..

( Posted by: Thea [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )


( Posted by: laur [Member] On: July 3, 2006 )

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