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On the floor
were metal casings
sailing on a
sea of red.

On the chair
was the man
half on, half off
all dead.

On the table
sat a note
written in
his hand.

“My life was cruel,
my life was harsh,
my life I cannot stand.”

On the report
one cop wrote
what the investigator
said:

“The worst suicide
I’ve ever seen,
six shots
through the head.”


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All that is necessary for the forces of evil to win the world is for enough good men to do nothing...Edmund Burke


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The following comments are for "Suicide"
by Psycho6058

huh?
I like it, but i don't get what's so funny?

( Posted by: Deeha [Member] On: June 5, 2006 )

suicide
Lucie thanks, glad I gave you a chuckle.
Deeha, If it really was suicide, do you think he would be able to shoot himeself 6 times? think ab out it.

( Posted by: psycho6058 [Member] On: June 5, 2006 )

Wayne
That's just like the guy saying to the cops...It was an accident...she fell on to my knife...(26 times?)...I watch a lot of cop shows and things like this do happen...but this one is written in fun and I did laugh...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 5, 2006 )

Too funny!
Just like the guy about 8 years ago that accidently killed his boss with 28 blows to his head with a hammer.

too funny!

I liked this,
Metulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 5, 2006 )

revolver
Oops! I did it again, and again, and again...

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: June 5, 2006 )

suicide
Thank you folks for all the comments, glad you liked it.

( Posted by: Psycho6058 [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

A Thought
That was just the way suicide is. One minute the person is alive and the next minute their dead. They usually go fast.

( Posted by: USGlen [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

Hilarious!
Clearly, there are degrees of incompetence! lol. This is totally what would happen if I ever gave suicide a shot (or six)!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

Dead again
You gave me six laughs! -I only needed one, so I guess I owe you?
-E

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: June 7, 2006 )





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