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Ferme Noir (Rated R)



Farm ablaze
The summer rays
Charm the crazy lovers' days

Tractor path through patchy trees
Has them back to catch the breeze
Coursing down a canyon cooled
By forces mountain phantoms rule

They dangle feet in crackling creek
Red apples and bleu cheese to eat
Playful daring chipmunks home
Great Blue Heron hunts alone

Then well away from neighbors' stares
They will play this game of theirs
She holds a branch to take her turn
Knows her man will make her burn

Hands tied above her head
Stance wide
A lovely spread
Cotton cloth across her eyes
Softly knotted sacrifice

His scissors slowly cut to shreds
Her clothes exposing supple flesh
Nipples rise to find the sun
Little eyes divining fun

She awaits what might be next
To be the place of light caress
The breeze is pleasing in her bush
And breathes a teasing at her tush

His fingers follow shadow lines
Diagonal on back and thigh
Dividing her now writhing shape
Into shades of black and white






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johnlovejr at hotmail dot com


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The following comments are for "Ferme Noir (Rated R)"
by Flonigus

Flonigus
John, this is why I love the farm. Back to nature.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

R-rated Farm Life
Oooo:-O (hOt)

bad boy. good writer.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: June 20, 2006 )

yes from Tori
You are right about everything. Rhyme and tasteful treatment of the yummy subject - confusing: which one of you is my husband?

"bush" and "tush" are convenient for the rhyme, but for me - as colloquial words - cooled the mood a little bit

excellent touch

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 9, 2011 )





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