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Today I sit behind myself
Reading and watching
Everyone who passes by
Smiling
Putting aside beside me
Affiliation and ease
Somehow today I did
Succeed
Enter to me a friend old
Render me a ‘hi’
Sulking but go he later
Wither
I hold on to this moment
Lest not to be found
Lo! If I will be founded
Brooded
Enough with lousy hellos
Profound is thought of mine
Rather to be remote
Outshone
Seen every one in vain
Evermore frowning
Come again be anonymous
Undiscovered
Tomorrow shall
Enclose
Death!

Gulam Abbas Hashmi
29-5-2006 2.10PM



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The following comments are for "Trespassers will be prosecuted (acrostic)"
by Abbas

Odd
I don't know how to treat this poem, and I really didn't want to rate it. I felt like a movie, looking at a person's life form behind and then the camara panning into the neverend. I dunno.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 11, 2006 )





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