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You Sipped of My Milk and Honey

I saw the knife coming but I ignored it;
I was distracted by the cologne
And couldnít see past the roses
Or the laissez faire afternoon sunlight;
Where we draped our bodies
In comfortable positions
As if we were one
In the crumpled sheets
Where the world was ours
And every blossom opened for us

You explored my landscape
In gentle strides and vigorous climbs
To the summit
Where all the view was beauty
And the air smelled of pine boughs
Where you were a man
Who had conquered
What no one thought you could

And I was a landscape of beauty
Where you bathed in my springs
And sipped of my milk and honey.
Oh, how we shamed Romeo and Lennon
For the weakness of their love
When compared to ours
Which inspired classical music
of mantises and birds

There would have been no knife
Had there not been love
There would have been
No blood spilled
On the clay tiles of my garden
Where I used to pick flowers for you.

I lie now in the blossoms and weep
With my nightie crumpled around me
And I slump in a ball
Where all I can see is the dirt
And canít find the strength
To lift my garden trowel
To plant more flowers for you

There's only today

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The following comments are for "You Sipped of My Milk and Honey"
by LadyMitulia

I weep, so beautiful is this poem. Love is a treacherous affair isn't it?

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 3, 2006 )

Thank you for commenting... Crooning... could you suggest an edit?

I appreciate your feedback, and have enjoyed reading your pieces posted here.

Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

Siah - thanks
I am glad to see that someone posted comments on this piece.

This is my first posting, and I was hoping I would get feedback - good or bad.


Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

Lady Mitulia
Sicne you commented on mine, I had to at least check out yours (show me your and I'll show you mine and all that). And what a poem! Whew. I'm sweating after reading this one. Intense. Luscious scenic description.

And then . . .

It all goes to shit. All that passion chanelled from love into -- what is it? Jealousy, I think. Well done.

Minor correction: It's "laissez faire" not "lazifare".

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

viper - death perhaps
Actually, the knife was symbolic - representing the pain of loss of love, through betrayal, break-up, or death.

I really envisioned an old lady, thinking back to her youth with her husband and their love, then how she tried to go on after his death.

The spilled blood is her loss of ability to find the resolve to go on... as when a spouse dies, so often the other soon follows because they have lost their reason to go on

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

Oooh - I like that. I knew I was being lazy when I posted that. It was a deadline day for a rather lofty grant application and I had resolved to write a poem before I got back to it.

Thanks for the comment

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

Viper - lazy is more like it
I knew it was wrong, but was having a total mental block about what it was. I was so far off, that spell check didn't even suggest anything.

(My kids say, Mom, if you ever get alzhiemer's (sp)- how will we know?

I was determined to post before putting my nose to the grind stone that morning - a new discipline.

Thanks for doing my homework... I stand corrected.

Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: LadyMitulia [Member] On: June 4, 2006 )

Lady's "...Milk and Honey"
Superb use of able, adept, adroit, alert, apt, astute, brainy, brilliant, cagey, canny, capable, competent, cunning, deep, DEXTROUS, discerning metaphor!

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

Thanks so much!

I appreciate your visit to my piece and your comment.


Mitulia Louise

( Posted by: ladymitulia [Member] On: June 6, 2006 )

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