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(my second attempt at a haiku - 5-7-5)

winter comes early

the leaves fall first, then the snow

covers all I see


(Whatever you think about the writing, whatever you do, PLEASE take the time to comment. I'm looking for constructive critism; blocks upon which I can build. THANKS!!! rajengineer)

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The following comments are for "Winter"
by rajengineer

re: winter/Eric
Hi Eric,

I think I know what you mean. The poem doesn't really say alot. I don't know if I can blame it all on the structure/limitations of the form. It could be the subject, the wording, or both.

At any rate, it's good to get a nice, straightforward "rejection" sometimes. It reassures me that when I get a compliment, it's honest/sincere. Afterall, we don't want what so aptly referred to as a "Mutual Admiration Society", now do we?

That's for reading - and thanks for your honesty. :-)


( Posted by: rajengineer [Member] On: May 22, 2006 )

Yes keep at it
I too write alot of them some good others ???. The hardest part for me in the count. Now as what you say in them is up to you, there is another form just like Haiku same count but deals in different subject matter and seeing as Lit only has one section for both that is why you may see some getting picked on about their subject matter. So do as and Pen and others do just keep at it. Good luck

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: November 19, 2006 )

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