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(this is my first attempt at a haiku; I read something about a 5-7-5 rule, so that's what I'm trying. Chime in with any/all comments, critisms etc...)

two days
too much rain

saturday
sunday
both gone

Monday brings
clear skies

------
Robert

(Whatever you think about the writing, whatever you do, PLEASE take the time to comment. I'm looking for constructive critism; blocks upon which I can build. THANKS!!! rajengineer)


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The following comments are for "Too Much Rain"
by rajengineer

Raj
Tap is right about the arrangement of the Haiku...but I'm not one for following the rules all the time...I like the way you made this piece your own...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: May 21, 2006 )

Raj..Rain.
This is nice one..I had tried Haiku before.

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: May 22, 2006 )

Raj
I too try to write Haiku and do not follow the rules exceppt for count(and even mess up on that at times). So play with it somemore and see how it feels to you. Your try was good first one.

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: September 22, 2006 )





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