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certain reasons have been revealed
for the dress to slip down across your skin

as it hits the floor i get it
so i gently raise my arm

a wonderful caricature
of a complete human being

dry and sarcastic, a reminder
of that warm beer before

certainly i'll help you to concieve
just let me get my syrenge

your fragility invites my hand to lower
in the rhythm of a one-winged butterfly

spiraling down
too light to crash

these sardonic touches go skin deep
progressing into dirt, that six feet

the dress on the floor and you down in it
i shall remind you why they call me a loser

suck it up
it'll be a whopper, kid

------
Forecast is for "bad craziness". - - - Dr. Hunter S. Thompson


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by Adrian Shepard

a wonderful caricature
top quality talent and poem.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: May 19, 2006 )





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