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In the middle of a raging sea
everyday rain pelts down on me
and I so naive
thought that these would carry me
to the shores of paradise that I can hardly see,
but these waves like rocks crash into me

In my mouth I hold the key
only these three words can set me free
He molested me


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The following comments are for "Storm Clouds"
by Deeha

Good
Great rhythm, style and it is a definite hitter.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: May 16, 2006 )

re: Storm Clouds
I won't even try to critique the poem itself; the message is so important.

My heart goes out to you, or whoever you're writing about. For anyone to survive something like that, and then tell others shows real strength of character.

RAJENGINEER

( Posted by: rajengineer [Member] On: May 16, 2006 )





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