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Like an abacus 1 2 3 4
clicking and clacking back and forth
absolute, unchanging, save the
red paint wearing off
and the callous building
on the side of my finger.

The great pendulum swings
never hanging to the left or the right
as much as we try to hold it in
the position we desire.
The earth still perpetually turns
its power remains omnipotent.

Yet humanity tries to survive
in a bramble bush of confusion
tearing their skin from wicked thorns
as they reach and strive for
fat berries sweet and ripe.


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"If you have the chance to sit it out or dance, I just say Dance." writen by Mark Sanders recorded by LeeAnn Womack


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The following comments are for "Click Clack"
by BevRaffaele

Bev
Bev...this poem tells me that no matter what's going on in the world...the earth keeps turning...thing around us remain the same...while we are sctatching at life with bloody fingers...trying to get ahead...I like it...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: May 12, 2006 )

click clack
I like it. I get the same thing from this as Kacee does.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: May 12, 2006 )

Bev, nice to see you here!!
I've enjoyed reading you on other sites and I thought I had read some of your past submissions here....I am sure I did but didn't comment, for now I am sorry I didn't take that bit of time to. I find commenting is a great way to share not just of numbers but from reader to writer so that you really know how your poems reach out to others.
The great pendulum....as I agree with Kacee and Unseen, this is a very tranquil and truthful poem. Nothing stops time. There are so many poems and stories about time I believe that there is nothing cliche of it. No one expresses, nor senses time like one another. Your "Click, Clack" is a very nice read. I've enjoyed this with my morning "waking up time". Thanks for sharing here Bev. Be well, stay happy and keep that pen busy!~
~Dareva~

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 16, 2006 )





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