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Life is a prison,
Oh God let me out.
No one to listen,
To hear when you shout.

Climb the walls of insanity,
Ride the waves of despair.
If you fall it don't matter,
There's no one to care.

Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high.

Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away.
Seeing joy, love and happiness,
Another price that you pay.

Strong is good, weak is bad.
Be it false, be it true.
Your mind makes the choice,
And enforces it too.

Cell walls built by society,
With rules to adhere.
If you breach the acceptable,
You had better beware.

------
T.D.G.


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The following comments are for " Life is a prison"
by TravisDPanda

hey!
very interesting poem.. i like it, but do you really feel that bad? i hope you dont! i love ya and im always here for you! i cant wait to here more!

( Posted by: grandmasgirl [Member] On: May 11, 2006 )

Life...
Well said.

( Posted by: MsTink [Member] On: May 11, 2006 )

My fav stanza...

Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high.

Particularly the last two lines. I enjoyed this poem both from the prisoner's point of view as well as it being a metaphor for life. Going along with the metaphor.. I liked this line:

Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away.

( Posted by: FurryNippleRing [Member] On: May 12, 2006 )

Thank you
Thanx

( Posted by: TravisDPanda [Member] On: May 17, 2006 )





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