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All is done
with the descent of a red sun.
It seems so long ago
when the blood shed begun,
but now where wounds once were skin grow.

I still feel the pain though.

Nightmares come with the death of the sun
and in the shadows lurks forgotten fears.
The moon is merciless,
beating an already ailing soul.

I won't give him the satisfaction of tears.

I absorb each blow of an endless abuse
and still way too proud
no one knows
because even the thought is too loud.

Just say it
I demand myself,
but the words are with my last breath.

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The following comments are for "Just Say It"
by Deeha

nicely done
I like these lines. This is nicely done."Just say it
I demand myself,
but the words are with my last breath."

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: May 1, 2006 )

I Agree
Those words are nicely said.

( Posted by: deraj [Member] On: May 1, 2006 )

I loved the phrase...
"Just say it." I absolutely enjoyed this piece. I think you have a unique voice :) Here are some words that you're poem inspired:

I once believed in many things,
but never once did they reply.
How far are you gonna take it?
Was it malice that made you this way?
Beating me 'til you satisfy your appetite
just so you can walk on the streets feelin' like
A regular man.
Is the price too human for you to let it go?
In the end, there are no points of authority
and we die pushing ourselves away.
Perhaps one day you'll see where your frailties lie.
Only then will my demons die.
Until then, I will never see a good night.

( Posted by: FurryNippleRing [Member] On: May 3, 2006 )

Well done.
Deeha, thanks for a nice poem. Keep posting and take care.


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: May 6, 2006 )

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