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A PAIR OF UNSCARRED KNEES
HIT FROZEN CONCRETE
NO ONE WILL EXTEND THEIR HAND
BECAUSE THE HELPLESS
SOUL MUST UNDERSTAND
WITHOUT AID FROM ANYONE ELSE
THE HORRIBLE CONCEPT OF FALLING
I WATCH EAGERLY
HOPING SHE WILL GET BACK UP
AND KEEP FIGHTING,
BUT I, MYSELF AM PUT TO A TEST, HAVING TO IGNORE HER SHEEPISH CRY
BECAUSE THOUGH I PUSHED HER I CAN NOT HELP HER,
BECAUSE IF I DO THE HELPLESS LITTLE ANGEL WILL BE DOOMED TO DIE
MY HEART STARTS
BEATING AGAIN
WATCHING WHEN
SHE LIFTS HER INNOCENCE
WITH A TWINKLE PASTED IN HER EYE
TEAR SWEPT AWAY
BLOOD LEFT WHERE SHE ONCE LAY
I WONDER IF WHEN
I FELL AS SHE HAD IF I HAD GOT UP OR IF UNKNOWING STILL LAID,
AGAINST THE SIDEWALK OF ICY BITTERNESS


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The following comments are for "Bitter Ignorance"
by Deeha

bitter ignorance
this had deep intenseness that was made more so by the capital letters. I found it interesting to read.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: May 3, 2006 )





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