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Sky's the twin of the sea,
a stroke away
from possibility

Over the deep,
beguiling clarity
the real motion

Breathe

------
Stille


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The following comments are for "The Swimmer"
by Dew Of Blood

Brought back old memories
I used to be on a swim team and over practice. Who knows how many thousands of meters we swam. When all you see is the tiles on the bottom of the pool moving by, sometimes your mind kinda drones out between the tiles going by and coming up for breath. The pacing of your poem kinda reminded me of that:

breathe, 1-2-3-breathe, 1-2-3-breathe, etc.

'Twas a good read :) Keep writing.

( Posted by: FurryNippleRing [Member] On: May 3, 2006 )





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