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Burning Desire.

On his return, it was rather late.
He had just excited his last date.
“Come in,” said he to his secret girl.
So this was she which caused a whirl.
“Thank you” she said, “You are so kind.”
A man like you are hard to find
Taking a deep sensual breath.
She took him down like death.
Would take a living, mortal soul.
She backed away for him to follow.
Which he did without knowing.
Into what dangers he was going.
“Come unto thy thee sexy beast.”
Everything proceeded at least.
Until one burning point of seduction.
She was leading him on to his own destruction.
He never gave the girl a fight.
Even when she gave the bite.
He never felt a single thing.
Not even the dreadful, deadly sting.
Before he knew it, he was dead.
Her lips were now a fulsome red.

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The following comments are for "Burning Desire."
by Man Eating Maniac

Kiss of Death!

First thank you for you comment on my poem 'Accent on Beverages' I will reply to you on that page.

I have not noticed you work before as I am a relative newcomer to the site, but I have just spent an hour reading all the poetry you have posted a lit.

I like your style and have selected this one as an example of the work I enjoyed, though they are all good. You have a good sense of rhyme and you use rhyme perfectly. As I only write in rhyme, to me this is an added bonus.

You are a very good poet and I noticed what I thought to be some of your best work had no comments, I think the site has now 'warmed up' a little, and I really feel it is now a community.

I had to smile where you got a 'warning' that one of your posts(the first?} may be too erotic. The line drawn now is reasonable and a new staff member is leading the way. This is not within my style however, unless humouros, though I do not disaprove.

I really like the poetry you have published on varying subject and hope you decide to post more frequently.

Have Fun,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

A Slight...
Twist to this one... The spider goes to the prey's lair...

I like the change...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

this is one of my greats.

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

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