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Melancholia sets in like rheumatism,
paralyzing the joints.
A joint would be nice.
The paralysis then would be but self-induced.

For months and months weíve watched the skies and hoped for just a spot of rain.
Now farmers rejoice but I am blue with dreariness
and I canít get my bones to be glad.

It doesnít smell clean, this dreary rainfall that continues and continues.
It is muddy and heavy hearted
Pouring down and down
Pooling in the crannies of the driveway
Puddling in the untended field.

The kitchen floor looks as desperate as I feel
and Iím not sure if the whole earth smells like a wet dog.
Or is it just my world?


------
Elizabeth Maksymiuk


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The following comments are for "Wet Dog Day"
by emaks

Wet Dogs- Tap
Hi Tap. Nice to see you.
Yeah, Rain for 40 days does that to me. Especially out here in the country. There is no pavement, no cement. Grass (and mud) and dust and dirt. With kids tracking in and out and 4 dogs coming in and out of the rain, it can be depressing. I hate when I just finish the kitchen floor, and everyone traipses in wet and muddy and I get to start the chore all over again!
Four wet dogs do not bring in a pleasant aroma!

Thanks for stopping by
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 27, 2006 )

Elizabeth
Rain is pretty depressing and wet dog smell is PU ..and kids draging mud all through the house drives ya up a wall... ..not so bad when the kids grow up...and the dogs are gone...but I can relate...I hope the sun starts shining for you...
look for a pm from me...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: April 27, 2006 )

dog day

Good descriptive piece of some really sucky weather. If I am correct you live in a southern state, and I know they are boiling hot. Here In Chicago it is frigid and unpredictable. We go from high nippy 60ís then drop to high 30ís at night. That sucks too. I hope I read your poem right. I still have not put my winter coat away.
Your read mad me feel the drenching humidity of Dixie.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: April 28, 2006 )

it's rather late
saturday night. i just read your poem. i was drawn in by the title. the poem's word play is great. it's really very well done.

respectfully,

john. john doe.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: April 29, 2006 )

Wet Dogs
Like everyone else, The title thru me off but I to know how ya feel about the floors. Seems like everytime my wife does the floors here it pours and we have a brand new house and the grass has yet to fill in and lo and behold, Here comes Cody
(our 95 pound boxer) slidding across the kitchen with boy child in tow, Red mud and all. Whew, and we thought we were the only ones with that problem. Dont worry though, Just take another hit, sit back and relax. It cant rain forever.
Thanks for the read.
"Keep on inkin the Pages"
Poison

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 30, 2006 )

Fantastic first stanza
You've really nailed the dithery rheumatic melancholy induced by relentless rain - all irritable and inactive. I can just imagine you sitting, gazing glumly at the muddy floor, indulging in a half-hearted dope fantasy!

'I canít get my bones to be glad' is my favorite line: it says so well how the weather affects our mood at bone-level (even on the most terrible days, searing sunshine makes my bones stubbornly cheerful!). And the dreary humour of the final lines is delicious. I'm saying a quick prayer for sunny weather in your home state!

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: April 30, 2006 )

wet dog day
your writing is so interesting and changes in many ways. Always good to read you.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: May 3, 2006 )

Wet dog- KC,MacB,JJD,Poison,Mobious,Unseen
Thank you for reading and commenting. These rains make one feel so isolated and alone. The dogs love me, but I can't say I'm crazy about them right now! Your kind comments help-

Mobious I love "dithery rheumatic melancholy induced by relentless rain"- YOU nailed it!

ah, well, back to mopping. Thanks for time and comments.
-waiting for sun for me, hope you are all snug and warm and surrounded by aromas more pleasant than wet dog!
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: May 3, 2006 )





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