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She murmurs medicine
from five hundred miles away
while I lie bone weary
eyes tight against my pain.
Her gold whiskey voice,
so smooth as it soothes
submerges me by inches
rocking me beneath it's waves.
I struggle against
the undertow of approaching dreams
but her voice is gentle, insistant
and I surrender myself
drowning in her tidal
embracing sound.

Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.

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The following comments are for "Murmur"
by Bartleby

to Bartleby
Wonderful poem, and flowing imagery. For some reason I'm imagine the sea for this, except the "golden whiskey voice" put me slightly off at first. Nonethelss it fits. I think this is one of those individually applicable poems, great job.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: September 27, 2002 )

Oh, how relaxing it was reading this poem!

I swear to you, I heard the sound.

I liked this alot, it has a lovely, leisurely pace to it which is perfect for what it dscribes.

Well written, Bartelby!


( Posted by: Jasmine [Member] On: September 28, 2002 )

one word

( Posted by: josey [Member] On: September 28, 2002 )

Mega !

Very flowing and expressive. I love the way you really concentrate on the senses and how the main focus feels.

Mega job !

100 B.

( Posted by: 100 Bullets [Member] On: September 30, 2002 )

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