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I wish I could hear your voice tonight.

We are caged within
not always with iron bars.

Walls of iron separate us,
cement and razor wire.
The chasm of emotion,
our canyon of hurt,
is the baggage of prior pain.
It is the steel that entraps us.
We imprison ourselves in our fear.

Disappointment loses love
-be warned!

Love should lift us up on borrowed wings,
bolstering ever higher.
It gently holds and molds our hearts,
tempering with its fire.
Love beckons us to strive to be
worthy of our heart’s desire.

An atmosphere of love proceeds
where trust and respect grow.
Lacking either of these vital legs
winds of resentment blow,
and if they’ve both been undermined
the strongest love will go…

Elizabeth Maksymiuk

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The following comments are for "Bars"
by emaks

Elizabeth, This says so much, Especially the last two stanzas. Very nicely done.
Thank you so much for shareing this one.
"Keep on inkin the Pages"

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 25, 2006 )

Lucie/ Poison- Bars
I realize this is a bit weak, but was written to speak to a friend. He's in jail and mad at the world, but not justifiably so. You don't piss off a judge, no matter how right you are... He can throw you in jail, and you don't have the same power- Sometimes you need to realize what power you have. Keep love alive through appeciation and respect. (There's real power there!)
Hope the message reached those who needed to hear it!
Thanks for reading and commenting-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 26, 2006 )

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