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I can't sleep
I'm going insane
Cause I have lost you
And have nothing now
The empty darkness of the room
Reminds me of the love we share
We speak on the phone
Still it's not enough
I play with the ring upon my finger
I can't forget
The happiness you give me

Your arms around me
Holding me securly
Gently kissing my lips
Saying goodnight
Ihold back the tears
As the love increases my thinking of you
These thoughts driving me crazy
Why did this happen
Why are we not together
I miss you......

Truth is... every person that you meet is going to break your heart ..... you just have to dexide who's worth it.


The following comments are for "~ Insane ~"
by saitansprincess

Somehow I have this feeling that you are capable of writing beyond this level. This is more of a journal entry than a poem. Give it another rewrite.

( Posted by: TINKER [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )

~ Insane ~
I dont think this sounds like a entry into a journel at all. From someone who has been in this position before, If you read between the lines you can feel the emotion and the hurt that this poem posses. Very nicely done.
"Keep on inkin the Pages"

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 23, 2006 )

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