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Mental Trip

This is a trip especially arranged
Thru the mind of the mentally ill and deranged
The voices you hear are always there
Screaming and shouting sometimes they even swear

Tormented and tortured you try to escape
Every move or sound you make being caught on tape
Your mind in a state of constant confusion
Everything you see and hear is just and illusion

Suffering thru life it started at birth
Leaving you to feel you have little to no worth
Death would seem to be your only relief
When dealing with life and all its grief

Youíve tried several times to end the pain
Your attempts were futile and nothing was gained
Unstable and lost you are mentally unwired
Running wide open and constantly tired

The darkness inside takes over your mind
Itís your soul youíre searching for only never to find
With all hope gone you suddenly realize
Your life from this point on will be constantly scrutinized

Surrounded by padding and tucked far, far away
Locked up safely never again to see the light of day
So you sit and you wait for it all to end
As you rock back and forth talking to your unseen friend

Lost and confused as you sit silently and gaze
Wandering the paths in your mind of a mental maze
Losing your grip on life and all its reality
You become but one of lifeís mental fatalities

Dignity lost you have been stripped of your pride
Thank you for coming on one of lifeís little mental rides

Steve E Poore
June 16th 2004


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The following comments are for "Mental Trip"
by POISON9901

This is really excellent poem ! I really feel that those who are mentally ill can't live..can't die..It is inbetween. I feel it's really terrible to be in that state of mind.

I literally went into a mentally ill mind reading ur poem, buddy. Thank God, I am normal.

Thanks a lot for this write. Keep writing and sharing.

Take care...


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )

Mental Trip
G.S. Glad it was only a "Outside looking in" situation. Hope I didnt scare you to bad but as windchime said "This is a terriable state of mind to be locked in. Thanks for the read and the comment.

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )

Mental Trip
Windchime,,Thank you so much for the comment and the compliment. I to would hate to be forever locked away in this state of mind. The voices would surely push me over the edge. Im glad you enjoyed my work and again many thanks

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )

mental trip

Deep stuff, I am also glad you are no longer suffering from that ailment. I liked how you thoroughly described "darkness" to novices (not a pretty thing).

I liked : "Unstable and lost you are mentally unwired"
Since now there is so much psycho-babble from pharmaceutical companies out there in the media about our brains being wired wrong-the dopamine going somewhere else, and shooting "misfires"

For me, with the exception of hearing voices, it's just like having a bad day.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )

Steve's Trip...
you scared even me with this one, I thank my lucky star I don't know this trip, having took one or two myself...and may you be blessed only to write of suck dark, lonely places...

Mental illness is a scarey world by many and a misunderstood one by more, simply because they have never been there. Some try and truely care,
it's like with any other illness if you haven't experienced it, it's difficult to grasp what the pain may be.

Then there's the stigma of the shallow minded (the true mentally ill), "Oh, he/she's crasy"
and other cruel things to rip a humans soul out,
self-esteem, there it went right with the soul...

Alway's consider the why's of someone condition, be it whatever, most illnesses aren't me no one ask to be ill,
a little kindness goes so very, very far...

I do appreciate this write, pleased you brought up the subject...

take care,

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: April 23, 2006 )

No luggage needed
Macbeth: Thanks for the comment, Im very glad my wires are still connected properly. Or, at least I tink they are,,,LOL. Thanks so much for the comment and taking the time to read my works.

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 23, 2006 )

Steve's Trip...
Nope, no way. This trip I cancelled long before the time came to go. Thanks for reading and commenting on my works. And yes , like you , I believe that a little kindness does go along way.
This problem is one that so many are just to willing to turn their backs and to let someone else take care of it, No one is really wanting, Or for that matter willing to try to make a differance in these poor souls lives. Again thanks for the comment and the read.

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 23, 2006 )

Steve.. you had to be there
deep and real and going there with you was a real trip.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: April 26, 2006 )

"Not Yet"
LMJ,Thanks for the comment and I hope you enjoyed the ride, And as always please come back and see us again,,,,,LOL. Thanks for the comment.

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 26, 2006 )

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