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My Voyage
A Poem

I've been the traveler,
In this voyage of Life.
I've seen everything,
From the sun to the
Moon and the stars.
Those colourful
Flowers that blossom
and dry,
Reminds me like them
I'm also growing to die.
Life has given me
Some lasting relationships,
Which the sword of death
Has begin to cut
from the below.
I'm in a dilemma whether
To love life more,
That has given me a
Wonderful dream,
Or death that would wake
And take me to where
I truly belong.

By :- GSVK

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http://gsvasukumar.blogspot.com/


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The following comments are for "My Voyage"
by G.S.VASUKUMAR

My Voyage
I like this alot, And like your poem I too believe in live life to the fullest because ya never know when the ride will be over. Again thanks fo sharing this.
"Keep on inkin the Pages"
Poison

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: April 18, 2006 )

I
I especially liked the lines:
"Flowers that blossom
and dry,
Reminds me like them
I'm also growing to die"

In this line:
"Life has given me
Some lasting relationships"
I would take out the "some"... to me, it kind of dilutes the line.

I like the message and the imagery.


( Posted by: JewelL [Member] On: April 19, 2006 )

voyage
i too really like the imagery here... like almost a yearning for moving on, with a desire to stay.

Good

( Posted by: SongofCree [Member] On: April 20, 2006 )

Poison,Jewel and Song..
Thanks a lot for ur comments. The following lines

"Flowers that blossom
and dry,
Reminds me like them
I'm also growing to die"

are my favourite too.

Regards,

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: April 22, 2006 )





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