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your liquid kisses
role down my cheeks
burning my tender cheeks with your acid of love
burn me
scorn me choke me
do all that you can all that you wish
every thing
every thing i ever wanted
i see in your eyes
when i look in at you
all the fears
all the pains
they go
go away
your eyes like pools
pools of deep secrets and
acid love
your kisses they burn your touch it kills but
but your eyes
they give me longing longing to see
what lies under neath your silken clothes
give me what i want
every thing i need
my undone love
why cant you give me somthing
somthing that can
free me
from your acid love

i am a misuderstood lunatic

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by schindees

my acount has been frozen and this will be my new acount please belive me the real schindees

( Posted by: wolfe [Member] On: April 15, 2006 )

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