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cant you see me
from that
second stroy window
cant you see me
im right there
i just wana ask you for
one last chane
cause baby
i wana be there
for your
graduation your participation with me
just a couple of weeks ago after
break up day
i got warning in the mail
i think i know
know whos its from
cause baby i think its form you
your imagination
revelation and
congradulations
juz give me one last chance to
to fall in love
cause baby cant you see me
cause baby cant you be there
juz give me one last to
to fall in love
juz give me one last
one last chance
to fall in love
with
with you



------
i am a misuderstood lunatic


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The following comments are for "see me"
by schindees

seeing you
Hi. Thought I'd stop in and see something of yours besides that rant. I looked in at 'burning circus' but didn't like it much so left no comment. I didn't dislike it, ya know, just not my gig. I used to live in Bridgeport, btw, so know lots about p.t.
anyway. this is nice. good lyrics. I saw from somewhere you commented about guitars. My favorite guitarist is Eric Clapton, second favorite, my boyfriend. I know he's got a couple Tacamines (sp?), a Jackson, a Strat, and I don't remember what the bases are.
Keep writing. Your heart shows, and that is artistry. If you are going to want someone to take you seriously, on paper, you need to work on spelling and stuff. I'm not trying to give you a hard time, I hope you know. But to be taken seriously, you have to take it seriously, ya know? Good luck
best thoughts your way schindees-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 23, 2006 )

thank you
Elizabeth as of guitars i am a custom guitar builder and guitar tec in training the music industry is a great influence on me and my life
spelling im working on it
poetry s a hobby of mine ive been told im good so ive started posting thanks for not being harsh over my spelling.
the schindees

( Posted by: schindees [Member] On: April 24, 2006 )





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