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Hate wrought in bone
Vibrating along puissant edges
Of razor flavored words

Pain like December
Numbed by fear
And driven to extinction

Extinguished tears
Of a dying language
Echoing into ether

And all those that hear
Listen with stone ears

Inadequate conduits
For divine vibrations

Things better left remembered
But never said

"It is considered rude to silence a fool, but cruel to let him go on."

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The following comments are for "Things Better Left Remembered"
by SoulShade

Bare bones and stone ears
There's some really striking imagery in this poem: I particularly liked the powerful sadness in the 'stone ears' stanza (the following lines seem a bit contrived by comparison, but that's personal preference).

I struggled a bit with the poem's very abstract form... perhaps intentional, but I wonder if I'd feel more satified knowing what you were really trying to say. Are the hate, pain and tears the things better-unsaid? (Divine despite being negative?) If so, why? Whose are they?

Oh, and I'd drop the 'but' in the final line. Much stronger without it, I think.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: April 8, 2006 )

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