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Pieces promised to fit nicely together,
not one to remain unplaced,
carved into shapes forming every detail
to mirror our image.
Itís sole purpose to visualize
what we should be.
But my love,
this puzzle is broken.
Pieces scattered everywhere,
looks more like loose leaves in the fall,
nothing forms.
We are shapeless, lost and in
total chaos.
Rearranging each one carefully
only confuses it more so
I place each piece back in the box
seal it tightly.
Gently yet painfully
I hand it back to you.
One day you will find
a way to make this puzzle whole.


------
I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Puzzles"
by nae411

Eric and Lucie
Eric, I have to laugh your responses are sometimes better than the poetry, lol. You are too clever my friend.

Lucie, I think or should I say I hope things are getting better (well as far as me writing my rants anyway). Thank you for stopping by and commenting. You always bring a smile to my face.
Love you dearly my friend.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 30, 2006 )

puzzle
I loved everyword of this amazing poem especially the ending oh how wonderfully you have expressed yourself if only the answers were that simple to just hand the box back and wait for the pieces to become whole but yet we may find ourselves waiting alife time. Excellent write
Cathy

( Posted by: mom11159 [Member] On: March 31, 2006 )

Puzzles
Oh how this one hits me deep, the sentiment, the expression, the lovely tempo of your poem resonated within my heart. Thank you so much for this lovely gem! LOL

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: April 1, 2006 )

Puzzles...
Life is a puzzle...perhaps we may slove it by the end. Nice poem. Thanks for sharing the same with us.

Please post more.

GSVK

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: April 2, 2006 )

Nae
Yes, there are a lot of broken pieces that we must deal with in our lives. It seems if we just let nature take over all becomes right again, it is only when we meddle that all gets muddled, like leaves -- great image.

I have soooo many boxes of tattered puzzles in my closet....I think I understand this one a little better.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: April 11, 2006 )

Puzzles - thank you.
Thank you guys/gals. I guess I am not the only one who feels like things don't always fit.

Cathy you are so right, if things were only that simple. Life is so complicated, but I guess that is what makes it so worth living.

Eleda, it is so nice to see you here again. I appreciate you stopping by.

GSV, Don't know if we will really ever solve it but at least we are entertained trying.

BW, I have a few boxes of my own. I am glad you got the big picture.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 12, 2006 )

Nae' Puzzle
I like to make the pieces fit,
but sometimes alter them a bit.
I break some off, and some reform,
to make them suit, what I call norm.

Alas, it isn't always so,
and sometimes pieces will not go,
just where we would all like them to,
so what is it we have to do?

When things don't fit the way we choose,
it's then we stand to gain, not lose.
For then we have to seek new skill,
and sometimes take a bitter pill.

It's us that sometimes have to change,
and find a way to rearrange,
the bits of us that are too tight,
to let the picture turn out right.

So when we finally get our 'box'
and life's picture is whole,
some pieces of the puzzle,
we will carry in our soul.

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: April 17, 2006 )

puzzles
It is so much hard when things got scatterred and we stand still without any strength to bring them together....This graphic image of puzzles in ur poem is a small size picture for a giant real life..I hope your puzzle is pcked together soon
enjoyed this artistic poem
all the best
Hiba

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: April 17, 2006 )





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