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scorch me
with your touch,
so that I may feel
the rush,
heat rising
up my spine purifying
stagnant energy
releasing something

"Until the juice ferments a while in the cask,
it isn't wine. If you wish your heart to be bright, you must do a little work." Rumi

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The following comments are for "Tantra"
by eleda

How I wish someone could come and do that to me also.....Thanks for this great....moving...piece of art.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

Thank you
Serendipity...i think there is more pleasure from writing when the reader receives and understands the essence of what has been written. So, my dear, I truly appreciate your compliment.

Lucie, you have such a keen perception for what has been written in this poem...and yes, Rumi would love it...Thank you my friend!

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: March 30, 2006 )

I liked the poem, not long enough.

( Posted by: whilst [Member] On: March 31, 2006 )

Really Great..
Hi Eleda, This was really great work. Keep it up.

Take care and keep posting.


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: April 2, 2006 )

Touchy Feely

Apart from being a well written piece sharing an obvious message of the spiritual/sexual bonding of two individuals by touch I think you have touched (pun intended) on something deeper here.

There is an instant bonding that is virtually unexplicable between individuals by touch alone that goes beyond our normal six physical senses.

Whilst it may not always be:
'the rush,
heat rising'

as expressed in your poetry, it can certainly be a spiritual confirmation of a bonding of conciousness. This is special and does not exist in every physical contact.

There is also, of course the other side of the equation, the ones who's touch makes you skin crawl and you 'feel' their contact is to be avoided.

Once again your poetry has trancended the written words and left us examining forces beyond the 'obvious'.



( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: April 5, 2006 )

Thank you so very much for the wonderful compliment. And yes, some physical touch can be repulsive and annoying to say the least. You have great insight my friend! LOL

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: April 6, 2006 )

Well I think it's wiked even though it is got the feeling across in so few words though that it jus I dunno how to explain it lol but i still love it so keep writin man peace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: April 6, 2006 )

it works
yes...this works for me. i know what you mean. although the divinity varies in my experinece...:)

( Posted by: wrdekle [Member] On: April 13, 2006 )

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