Making Sense
by monkpeabody (Member) - published: March 28, 2006
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Category - Poetry
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What love can you give
with strings attatched
I give you mine
and you give it back
an echo
a mirror
no substance
not real
all smoke and illusion
but nothing to feel
what awful condition
and terrible truth
makes us try to prove
what needed no proof

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Life is rhythm and rhythm is everything!
-Monk-

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The following comments are for "Making Sense"
by monkpeabody

fabulous!
It's not often I am smitten with a love poem. What makes this so wonderful is how the truth is delivered with crystal clarity.

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: March 28, 2006 )

Making Sense
Ahhh...this was fantastic, right to the core of proving what love is--you expressed it beautifully. Thank you, look forward to reading more of your work.

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

thank you
Thank you both for the feedback and positive comments, now that I'm back I look forward to enjoying and being inspired by all this great writing on lit.org.
It's good to be back

( Posted by: monkpeabody [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

Making what?
Never knew love to make sense.

Still don't.

That said, I'm with eleda on this: this offers the reader what love is. So much is always written about what love does, or has, or wants, (or, or, or...) and never enough about what it is.

Thank you for posting this. The echo and mirror are particularly compelling images.

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

strings
Beutiful piece. A good subject too: love while having strings attached. I don't think the condition is awful. Just complicated. Good work.
Where have you been so long?:)
All the best, Thea

( Posted by: Thea [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

Love grows...apart
'Lo Joe...

This reminds me of some long term relationships (and some not so long term)

You know .... where one party has lost interest, and the love part is out of....well I dont know ....habit or worse cant be bothered to move on.

Eric

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

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