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What love can you give
with strings attatched
I give you mine
and you give it back
an echo
a mirror
no substance
not real
all smoke and illusion
but nothing to feel
what awful condition
and terrible truth
makes us try to prove
what needed no proof

Life is rhythm and rhythm is everything!


The following comments are for "Making Sense"
by monkpeabody

Making Sense
Ahhh...this was fantastic, right to the core of proving what love is--you expressed it beautifully. Thank you, look forward to reading more of your work.

( Posted by: eleda [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

thank you
Thank you both for the feedback and positive comments, now that I'm back I look forward to enjoying and being inspired by all this great writing on
It's good to be back

( Posted by: monkpeabody [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

Beutiful piece. A good subject too: love while having strings attached. I don't think the condition is awful. Just complicated. Good work.
Where have you been so long?:)
All the best, Thea

( Posted by: Thea [Member] On: March 29, 2006 )

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