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Iím just an Average guy
No matter how hard I try

Iím just an Average guy

Iím not the Strongest guy
Iím not the wisest guy
Iím just the Average guy
just the average guy

I donít have rock hard abs
I donít have perfect diction
I donít have tons of Cash
I donít write a lot of fiction
I donít have a good job
I donít have a nice car
Iím just the average guy thus far

Iíve never really been ďrippedĒ
Iíve never really been ďSmoothĒ
Iíve never really been ďFineĒ
Iíve never been able to ďmanage timeĒ

Iím just an Average guy
No matter how hard I try

Iím just an Average guy

Iíve tried to be a good friend,
Yet, there is always nothing to show in the end
Iíve tried to be an honest guy,
except for a little white lie
Iíve been the type of guy a girl will call a friend,
But not the type theyíll call a boyfriend,

Iím just an Average guy
just an Average guy

Watch a falling comet,
Jump up and bop it.
Dance with a hobbit,
and leave me a comment.

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The following comments are for "I'm Just an Average Guy"
by BelovedGreatWolf


The title has a ring to a Lou Reed song, but anyway, your honesty is not what most ďaverageĒ men would do. What is ďaverageĒ? However, donít sell yourself short-it sounds like you have a sense of self. Unless your yanking our chain (lol).

I enjoyed your monologue,


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: March 28, 2006 )

I feel your pain, just change all the 'girls' and 'guy's and its exactly the same for me.

( Posted by: SingChi [Member] On: March 31, 2006 )

I've never been average for that would kill me.
And nowhere I look can an 'average' I see.
All folk are special, in their special way.
Whether at work, or in love, or in play.

Some hateful bastards could not be called norm'
While others to visions of sainthood are born.
But the thing that make everyone, exactly like me,
Is all are born different... no other like me!

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: April 1, 2006 )

Average Guy

Good, well expressed poetry, but the following two lines snagged for me:

"Iíve been the type of guy a girl will call a friend,
But not the type theyíll call a boyfriend,"

This is the only part of the piece where you lost rhytm and rhyme. It is also very difficult to get away with rhyming words that have the same part as the end syllables.

You can rhyme girlfriend with boyfriend etc. but 'friend' normally doesn't work with either.

I often hit this clash and have to take a different route myself.

"Iíve been the type of guy, a girl will call a friend,
But never as a boyfrend, am I treated in the end,"

This might have been a bit better and would have bounced off the first lines of this stanza.

As I have already said, I liked this one a lot, with your excellent use of repetition and play on words and hope to see more.

Have Fun,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: April 1, 2006 )

And the Critic!

And you will note, in my haste to post my original comment I myself have destroyed the rhytm and rhyme in my last two lines!

Would you like to correct it for me?


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: April 1, 2006 )

Average guy ha most people would say average is the best no mask no lies average ha what is average? You seem to sell yourself short and it seems that maybe you have it all and you don't see it. Loved your poem see your sadness hope you look inside to see the real you the best that you can be is all that is asked of your self. Your words tell me you are a super guy.

( Posted by: mom11159 [Member] On: April 1, 2006 )

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