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A couple of pigeons ,
Between dark, deep forests
Sings a ballad of humanity.


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by page3

page3/ "Humanity"
p3- I believe a 'couple of pigeons' would 'sing.'

Would they not sing ballad 'for' humanity? Just way I read it.

Once again, with all this pucntuation, a comma would follow 'forests.' (Personally, in senryu/haiku, don't feel any is needed.)

Interesting read,
Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 23, 2006 )

Humanity
Haiku inspired by yours:

couple of pidgeons
between two slices of bread
humanity fed

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 23, 2006 )

Ivordavies
It was good I liked it.

( Posted by: page3 [Member] On: March 24, 2006 )





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