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Sleeping birds, bald trees ,
Peace only peace
The spring is resting.

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by page3

flowers ablooming,
season of gold and honey,
the spring of freedom.

I love haiku. It is one of the few forms of poetry in which many thoughts, those chosen and unwillingly added in by the minds of the reader, can be expressed in three lines alone.

Though I like the traditional haiku (5-7-5) and I rarely deviate, I must admit that english is a hard language in which a haiku can come to great lengths without breaking a few rules.

This is a nice poem, though simple, but that does not mean a bad thing. Most things are made to seem more than simple while they are just that.

I like it.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: March 21, 2006 )

page3's / "Spring"
p3- What is purpose/reason for word "The" in line 3?

If you use commas in line 1 and period in 3rd, should there not be some sort of punctuation within and at end of 2nd?...(I would drop all punctuation in this senryu)..

Spring forward,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 21, 2006 )

Nice one...
Thanks for posting..Its simple and nice..

Take care,


( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: March 24, 2006 )

Thanks !
Thanks everyone to reply and suggest me good writing i need it badly coz im a newly writer I want to know the cultures of writings Thanks again 4 all I'll improve myself.

( Posted by: page3 [Member] On: March 24, 2006 )

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