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edward the elephant
was simply quite irrelevant,
his ears were not too big nor too small.

he was not pink or spotted,
or as some might say polka-dotted,
he mattered in the least, or not at all.

he wasn't albino,
didn't look like a rhino,
neither was too short or too tall.

Now you might think,
it might drive the beast to drink,
but most bottles were too round or too small.

there's other things to choose,
but what sanity he'd lose,
complaining of pink humans and all.

No edward the elephant,
was vastly just irrelevant,
so lets not give him one more thought at all.


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by wally 5

Edward the elephant??
Goodness, this was strange yet funny. I cannot detect any great social commentary but I did enjoy the lilt to your verse. What inspired this oddity? Its not your usual style but very enjoyable.

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: March 16, 2006 )

Irrelevant Elephant!
Darrin,

Yes, I love this one, but you knew I would! I can guess where this came from, it's surprising what a little push can do......

I also love 3 line verse and noticed you had kept the 'all link consitant throughout.

It's pieces like this that make all the serious stuff worthwhile writing and reading,

My hat's off to you (one for the nipper when he gets older?)

Unlike Witchy woman I feel that the great social commentry screams out of this piece... we couldn't live without it!

Namaste,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 16, 2006 )

Heffalumps and Woozles
A fun bit of silliness from you, Wally! This woudl be fantastic as a Dr. Seuss-style children's book. My own son would really enjoy this poem -- maybe as much as I!

All the same, I feel sad for poor Edward. If one really pays attention to the lines, he's quite a depressed character, isn't he?

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: March 16, 2006 )

Re:Edward the elephant
Dear Wally,
I very much enjoyed your poem, it reminded me of the first poems that I read that made me sit up and notice the way that words could be combined and bent to to express and enchant at the same time..delightful whimsey.

( Posted by: bonrudo47 [Member] On: March 16, 2006 )

irrelevant elephant
I like it. I can see you are a writer who likes to have fun too.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: March 25, 2006 )

ed is rlvnt


Allow me to posit a moral or less to your fable:

'It's not easy being sensible in a world of extremes.'

Or maybe... anyway, it's fun.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: March 25, 2006 )

I second his relevance
he definately lightened up my night :) especially the way you ended it was a funny touch. This and the easter bunny piece inspires me to have more "fun" with writing. btw, thank you much for the comment.

Regards~

( Posted by: FurryNippleRing [Member] On: April 14, 2006 )

Irrevelent Elephant-Wally5
A writer with the gift of silly-muc-dilly! Refreshing and fun read!

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: July 31, 2006 )





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