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Have you ever felt the world close in on you?
Where you cannot escape?
Life sucks the breath right out of your lungs,
And leaves you there,
Just leaves you,
You have no where to go,
Nothing to do,
So you lye around,
You just lye their,
No one helps you,
People continue on with their lives while you just lye their,
No one pays attention to you,
No one even cares,
You’re just another junky,
Just another same old person,
Useless,
Pointless,
Then when you try to get up they criticize you until your even more weak,
Then,
They leave you their,
To rot,
To die,
They just,
Leave,
You just lye their,
Looking around,
Lifeless




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The following comments are for "Lifeless"
by maleorderednurse

Emotion
great effort in emphasizing the despondent emotional place manifesting through physical retreat, giving up, caring not at all...the harsh, cruel, demeaning, blaming language only perpetuates the feeling of worthlessness...how to teach those who are possible victims to detect and protect against such possible fate?
be well~

( Posted by: satori [Member] On: March 15, 2006 )

wow
Wow, you read my mind, really, you actually new what i was trying to say,
thanks so much,
Steven

( Posted by: maleorderednurse [Member] On: March 15, 2006 )

lifeless
Please go to "My Cry For Help" and follow web site to The Sacred Pathway To Joy & Sorrow. Thanks for writing this few have your courage!

( Posted by: purplepassion [Member] On: July 9, 2006 )

No.
No, I didn't intend to ignore your response. Forgive me for the lateness of this reply; have been in chosen oblivion/distraction and am trying to hone in again.

No, thank you...for actually sharing and putting out there what you were trying to say. I find that the most difficult of all.

( Posted by: satori [Member] On: July 10, 2006 )





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