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when even was is lost
and is no more exists
there's very, very few
rise back up from the mist

when nothing stirs the soul
and life has left our heart
death beckons sweet release
so easy to depart

but know from one who's been
the fragile straw you grasp
is where we all must reach
before we breath our last

ivor g davies

The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

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The following comments are for "despair"
by ivordavies

I'm usually not one for poems that rhyme - nothing against that type of writing, but it's just not for me. Though I've found that I must make an exception for this poem. The thought behind the words, the even flow, and (yes I'll say it) the rhyme scheme made this poem a delightful read. I know that the title and much of the content would sound very depressing to most people, but I loved it and found it inspirational. I shall have to look at more of your posts. Keep writing. ^_^

( Posted by: silentgoodbye [Member] On: March 9, 2006 )

Ivor/ From deep in mist
Another familiar voice...Lans, Ivor..

Recall you as one of first who welcomed me here. Your guiding motto, "have fun," has encouraged more than few here, am certain..I, being one.

Enjoyed read..

"In middle of difficulty lies opportunity." - Albert Einstein

Hope all is hunky dory across pond,
Robert William, aka:Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 9, 2006 )

Fun and Games
silentgoodbye, Bobby, Bob,

Thanks for your comments, unlike my original piece 'depression' this was written with 'less is more' in mind, but I feel they both have their place.

I actually miss Lit at the moment as my life is like a whirlwind with the new job and I get little time but certainly still 'have fun'!

I have, however, still got one to write up that was written at 3am one morning in a hotel room while I was away running an assement centre for new managers. Its in my normal style and is .....never mind wait untill I post it....

Thanks again...

Have Fun,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

Hello again Ivor!!
Ivor happy to hear from you again!!!

You've really been missed...there are so few of us many new people here...we get lost in the crowd. We need your funny, incisive musings to wake us up!!

You've missed quite a few of our latest here...come back...come back wherever you are!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

exquisite use of rhythm and rhyme form

( Posted by: falkner [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

Ivor! Hi there sweet man! So wonderful to read you. It is starting to feel like home again. Stay Ivor!

Nae (one of the old crew, lol)

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

Keep grabbing those straws
Good to see you are posting here are a very fine writer and I enjoy reading your work...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )


I feel guilty sneaking in a post without taking the time out to look around and comment!

I have had a very interesting, fruitful and dare I say, time-consuming time lately. I've introduced many who may take a future interest into the realities of poetry and I'm talking about people who control others lives suddenly realising life is meant to be fun!

That's my excuse for my absence, but I do intend reposting, my muse is nagging at me like I nag at others - persistant with no room for quarter.

This is a part of my life that has been cut off and it is nice to be welcomed back, not only by my peers but noticably first of all by newcomers to myself.

Long live corny, unexcusable rhyme and everytime somebody says "I don't normally like rhyme..." I know I have I have succeeded in writing poetry... which trancends verse, rhyme, rules, style and disection.

I learned this from most of you and really must get back to enjoying the fruits of 'your' labours.......

have Fun,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

Very nice
Ivor -- good to see you again, as others have said. A voice I missed. This piece reminds me of one of my favorite rhyming poets, Emily Dickinson. As one who has no problem with rhyme -- when it works -- I enjoyed this poem very much. Because the rhyme does work. Good flow, very gentle and unassuming, which fits the topic.

Thanks for popping in. I hope to see more.

( Posted by: andyhavens [Member] On: March 10, 2006 )

Test ofTime

Compliment indeed, I wonder how much written nowadays will stand the test of time. Even the complete change in language has not taken away the beauty of Emily Dickinson's work.

Now that would be quite a project, to see if her work could be translated into modern day English and retain its validity. Nah....there was only one!
Because I could not stop for Death,
He kindly stopped for me;
The carriage held but just ourselves
And Immortality.........

Since then ít is centuries; but each
Feels shorter than the day
I first surmised the horsesí heads
Were toward eternity.

Emily Dickinson (1830-86)

Thanks for your comments,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 11, 2006 )

Emily Dickinson's test of time

Sometimes I wonder how some of the poets of old would be had they been born in this day and age? I read in school that so many of them were not accepted in their own day and some were even considered heretics and language manglers of their time. I like some of the old poetry and some of the new. I like many different kinds of things and I try not to be a snob about like my uncle who teaches English in college. I bet if he had been Emily Dickinson's professor he would have said she was an awful writer and poet because of her unusual punctuation and use of language being kind of radical and not considered proper usage back then.

Your poem has a very smooth glide in its rhythm and a just right beat to its rhyme.

( Posted by: tomasini [Member] On: March 11, 2006 )

Flotsam of Life?
Thanks for the comments:

'some were even considered heretics and language manglers of their time.'

I think it's us rhyming poets that get the blame nowadays and as for 'heretics'.... if you get the time to look back over my work you may also place that title on me!

Yes I did mean breathe, I'm having trouble with my keyboard at the moment and try to check everything.... damn spell check!

Interesting choice of words..flotsam. After a debate on language use, I think the 'real' meaning of this word is lost as an insult here in the UK.

Thanks for reading,


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 13, 2006 )


Speaking as a rather over-the-hill novice in the art of writing ,and appreciating great literature , I have to say that reading your pieces and your comments have really opened one's eyes to the myriad subtleties inherent in the craft. A long winded way of saying that one simply can't get enough of your posts.

In your quote from Emily Dickinson one senses certain similarities to the following from George Herbert " Love bade me welcome; yet my soul drew back, Guilty of dust and sin." One speaks of death and the other of love , yet eerily enough ,both seem to be taling about the same thing.

Re. your test of time : although it makes my insides curl ,nonetheless ,in my 'umble opinion the lines of the likes of Sting , Chris Martin and Bono Esq. should be around for ... time to come.

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: March 14, 2006 )

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