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i'm a student in video and i have to produce a short film. at the moment i'm looking for a good short story, but that's not so easy for me (because i'm not a writer). that's why i'm looking for help in this forum.

i have a basis for my story, but at the end i'd like to include a cool twist in the plot (but i haven't found this twist yet).

the story is about an artist (fine arts), who has a meeting regarding an exhibition. he's pretty nervous before this meeting, that's why he buys cigarettes at a vender with his last coins. he's running late for his appointment with a lady from a famous gallery. they watch his drawings and photos together, the talk is quite disappointing for the artist, he doesn't expect anymore that he can really exhibit his stuff in the gallery.

after the meeting he wants to drive home. after a while his car runs out of fuel, somewhere in the middle of nowhere, nobody can help him. he trys to call somebody with his mobile phone, the battery isn't charged. he begins to walk and trys to find help, maybe at aafte petrol station. after a while it begins to rain, his feet become wet, because he has forgotten to bring his shoes to a shoemaker to let them repair. it's becoming night, after a little while again he comes to a petrol station where he finds a public phone box. he wants to call somebody but he has no coins left because he needed the last coins for buying the cigarettes that he has just smoked. he walks to the shop of the petrol station, but the shop is closed...

at this point i have no idea how to find a good ending, maybe a twist in the plot to an unexpected finish of the short story.

is there maybe somebody that can help me, please? do you have any ideas for a good ending?
i'm looking forward to your help. Please!

thank you very much in advance,


The following comments are for "Twist in plot..."
by 062wsd

I''l try....
well, as I see it, the point where you left off is basically the all-time low in this story, the point when things are bleakest, and can only get better. so perhaps to emphasize this point you could make him maybe sit on his car and sing a song or something, the kind of last, futile, senseless action that will really show the hopelessness of his situation.
then of course, something has to happen that will both get him out of this "nowhere" and salvage his artistic carreer as I see it.
perhaps someone could walk onto the scene. someone just as woebegone and ruined as he feels himself. a person who lives in a ramshakle house near this "middle of nowhere"place, and has just gone out on a stroll from sheer despair. and as they both feel at the end of thier respective tethers, the artist gets to talking with the other man. and it comes out, after many awkward false starts, that the other man is basically ruined, because he operated a small art school and gallery, which people have ceased to patronize, and artists have ceased to lend their work to. this piques the artist's interest, and eventually he agrees to revamp the school/gallery, and contribute many of his elswhere rejected works. they will thus help rebuild each others lives. the artists will supply the artwork and instruction for the school/gallery, and the other man will continue in his role of manager of the gallery.

well, hope this helps a little...and best of luck!

( Posted by: marigold [Member] On: March 14, 2006 )

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