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the beauty of simplicity lies out of grasp and tacit.
a simple stick of incense is a sweet tinder and nothing more.
when seen in myopia.

yet if i could fathom but the curl of a single wisp,
clarity may guide thoughts to better end,
my hand to works of virtue.

though my breath is turbulence to this sweet shroud,
and my stench polutes subtlety beyond recognition,
leaving but a sprig,
with a flame,
consuming all,
to no end.


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The following comments are for "the fool washes & holds their breath"
by joeyjoejoe3

myopia
I liked this mildly torrid message you give, I found parts to be subtlety on the scathing side. However there is that scent that permeatesÖI enjoyed your choice in words. I donít know why many have not commented on your other works, they are pretty good. Iíll keep on reading.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: March 8, 2006 )





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