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4 X 4
= 11
auras connected
a bridge
through our minds
silence descends
yet the conversation
is rapid
behind no mask
our family lies
together we made it
together we stand
forever and for always
One Entity
we will be
'til the day of departure
we will then become 3

Thanks Scuba and Lisa without you guys I would have never made it this far...Peace

------
~~~dream as if you'll live forever...live as if you'll die today~~~


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The following comments are for "4X4=11"
by twistymisty

I Love it
Misty this is an awesome poem. I love it.

( Posted by: dentt [Member] On: March 5, 2006 )

Great expression in style
Such an expression is usually not found, especially in modern diction of abstraction.

You told us a story, so personal, but so universal! A bereavement, an anguish so deep that really turn all chemistry of conjugal relations into 4 x 4 = 11. Your new humble calculation doesn't take us to so called dark poems, but it preaches us go beyond our life bonds where the new progeny is awaiting and making an known arithmatic wrong.

The last lines are beyond any assessment.What a shot! Life must listen to the silent dew-drops of the affection and trickling sound of rotten oaths....

Yes, the simple style of the poem is adorable, moreover, it's a great expression. Let us undo our masks.

A great read indeed.

Regards,

Myth.
06.02.2006

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: March 6, 2006 )

11

Nice equation, have to read the end to figure it out. I like the clean and clever format you used. Makes one wonder how numbers are so vital to our being.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: March 8, 2006 )

Thank You All
Hey everyone thanks for your comments i really appreciate them...this poem has in only a few lines helped me to realize a lot of things and I hope it does the same for all who read it...thanks again Peace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: March 15, 2006 )





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