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Itd been so very long
very long
since I had a thought
about how she was

I'd been so very busy
I hadnt seen the news
that week

When last we met
she was barely twenty
Attending university
troubled so badly

When she had left
I heard she married a marine
Someone her daddy would approve
it'd been so very long
and much too soon
I almost wish I hadnt
picked up the page that day

so long ago
so long ago

In an instance it was done
Im sure she changed
I wouldnt be sure anymore
I couldnt recognize her face

So Long ago
So Long ago

I used to wonder at first
as time floated by
she was in the back of my mind
But I lived my life

It was a world away
But not as far as today
So Long ago
So Long ago

In an instance it was done
Im sure she changed
I wouldnt be sure anymore
I couldnt recognize her face

No Where to turn too
They didnt plaster her face
Another victim of the front page

Shot dead by her husband
Stains of love on her wedding band
his shirt clumped in her hand

She has a smile
She had a curious look
you couldnt estinguish

So long ago

I remember a poem I wrote
"hair of ember, eyes of topaz"
I mighjt of been young
maybe it was
Thats how I'd like to remember
The troubled girl
I met for one breif summer

So long ago



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The following comments are for "Long Ago"
by David_Loren

Very sad
A very sad poem this. I liked the way it evokes the feelings; It's a harsh subject but you've captured the emotions well.
From a critical perspective, I think there are some formatting issues that need to be fixed - mostly just consistency from one part of the peice to another. Also the repetition of the stanza begining "In an instance it was done" didn't seem to fit very well. Maybe if it needs to be repeated, there should be a wider gap before the repetition?
I get the feeling I may sound a little over-critical though. The points I'm picking at are only small; overall I did like it.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: December 27, 2002 )

beautiful
i liked this poem!!!kisseesssssssss from xxx-tabita-xxx

( Posted by: tabita [Member] On: June 9, 2004 )





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