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A gust of cold wind
Icy diamond drops chiming
Sweetly chilled white world

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The following comments are for "A gust of cold wind"
by PamHKyle

i'm not sure if this was your intent, or if it was anything close to your intent, but i enjoyed the racial implication of "chilled white world." the quick imagery is just enough to paint the scene without too many factors, giving the reader a clear picture, while at the same time allowing that picture to go wherever they want it to go...well done.

( Posted by: dmbrrphish7 [Member] On: February 27, 2006 )

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