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Cute red lips

Remember those girls,
who,
had cute curls,
and,
when asked out,
would,
firmly pout,
their,
cute red lips,
and,
hand on hips,
would,
make a fool,
and,
Feel a tool?
Cause,
when spoken too,
they,
had no clue,
that,
it wasnt a gag.
No,
cat in the bag.
So,
when asked out,
dont,
firmly pout,
your,
cute red lips,
cause,
I like your hips,
and,
I like your smile,
and,
all the while,
Id,
see you in class,
and,
youd walk pass,
Id,
Know your name,
Id,
Know your frame.
So,
when I ask you out,
you,
firmly pout,
those,
cute red lips,
and,
hand on hips,
guess,
what I think,
when,
I see you blink,
your,
Blue, white eyes,
while,
Other guys,
are,
Taunting and Taunting,
Since,
they dont see,
whats,
special to me.
So,
I asked your out,
You,
Firmly pout,
And,
Quickly smile,
Which,
Stretches a mile,
And,
Brightens my day,
Which,
Happens to be gay.
And,
You will say,
That,
Im happy this way,
So,
Let us live,
And,
Sweets give,
To,
You,
Who,
Knew,
My name.


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The following comments are for "Cute Red Lips"
by Siah

cute
would of taken these rhyming words in a whole other direction but thats just me. I think you did a cute job.

( Posted by: castanedalupe [Member] On: February 27, 2006 )

Gorgeous !
It is only one poem i read top to bottom. I liked too much this way of writing and choosing this rhyme scheme . I love this poem.
Keep working.I like to hear you soon.Its quite good.

( Posted by: page3 [Member] On: March 24, 2006 )

Cute Red Lips
I am so sorry I never posted a reply on this piece here. Page 3, thank you for the comments and Castane, you two. This poem has an odd history, I tried to mix a funny rhyme with a funny story and I got this. I like the fact you liked it. :D

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: June 22, 2006 )





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